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The bar graph illustrates ,the figure of Japanese travelers visiting in foreign lands during 1985 and 1995 while the line graph delineate the percentage of tourists, who visited Australia in particular between 1985 and 1994.

The bar graph illustrates, the figure of Japanese travelers visiting in foreign lands during 1985 and 1995 while the line graph delineate the percentage of tourists, who visited Australia in particular between 1985 and 1994. PEkOp
The bar graph illustrates, the figure of Japanese travelers visiting in foreign lands during 1985 and 1995 while the line graph delineate the percentage of tourists, who visited Australia in particular between 1985 and 1994. It can seem that, around 5 millions Japanese citizen travelled different countries in 1985, which kept increased each year except 1991. From approximately 7 million visitors to abroad in the year 1987. However a sharp surge noticed in 1994 which is double then past decades. Although, In the year 1995 the number of holidaymakers reached at peak 15 millions which is three time higher than last over 10 years. The line graph shows that 2% Japanese people visited in Australia for 1985 which rose significantly near by 5% in 1988 however in the next year shown a fall in the tourist business which was 4%. Moreover, Australia received more than 6% Japanese Travellers in 1993 the highest which stood at exactly 6% in 1994. overall the number of tourists travelling foreign country grown rapidly over a span of 11 years also Australia tourist market increased dramatically.
The bar graph illustrates, the figure of Japanese travelers visiting in foreign lands during 1985 and 1995 while the line graph delineate the percentage of
tourists
, who visited Australia
in particular
between 1985 and 1994.

It can seem that, around 5 millions Japanese citizen travelled
different
countries in 1985, which
kept
increased each
year
except 1991. From approximately 7 million visitors to abroad in the
year
1987.
However
a sharp surge noticed in 1994 which is double then past decades.

Although
, In the
year
1995 the number of holidaymakers reached at peak 15 millions which is three time higher than last over 10 years.

The line graph
shows
that 2% Japanese
people
visited in Australia for 1985 which rose
significantly
near by
5% in 1988
however
in the
next
year
shown a fall in the
tourist
business which was 4%.

Moreover
, Australia received more than 6% Japanese
Travellers
in 1993 the highest which stood at exactly 6% in 1994.

overall
the number of
tourists
travelling foreign country grown
rapidly
over a span of 11 years
also
Australia
tourist
market increased
dramatically
.
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IELTS academic The bar graph illustrates, the figure of Japanese travelers visiting in foreign lands during 1985 and 1995 while the line graph delineate the percentage of tourists, who visited Australia in particular between 1985 and 1994.

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