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The two diagrams compare the process of purifying water in Australia now and in the future.

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The two diagrams compare the process of purifying water in Australia now and in the future. Overall, it is evident that in the future, stormwater of the city will go through a water treatment plant to purify instead of directly going into the river. Then, it comes back to the city for consumption. In the present cycle, pure water is stored in a dam or storage before being transferred to the city and used by households, shops, and factories. After being used, the city stormwater goes directly to the river. The wastewater is sent to the river treatment plant to be processed then it is safe to be released into the water. On the other hand, regarding the future, the process of being stored and consumed is just the same as the previous system. However, both the stormwater and wastewater of the city will go through water treatment for recycling, and after being recycled, no water will be released into the river.
The two diagrams compare the process of purifying
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water
in Australia
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now
and in the future.
Overall
, it is evident that in the future, stormwater of the city will go through a
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water
treatment plant to purify
instead
of
directly
going into the
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river
. Then, it
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comes
back to the city for consumption.

In the present cycle, pure
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water
is stored
in a dam or storage
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before
being transferred
to the city and
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used
by households, shops, and factories. After being
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used
, the city stormwater goes
directly
to the
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river
. The wastewater is
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sent
to the
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river
treatment plant to
be processed
then it is safe to
be released
into the water.

On the other hand
, regarding the future, the process of
being stored
and consumed is
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just
the same as the previous system.
However
, both the stormwater and wastewater of the city will go through
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water
treatment for recycling, and after
being recycled
, no
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water
will
be released
into the
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river
.
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IELTS academic The two diagrams compare the process of purifying water in Australia now and in the future.

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6.5
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