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The two diagram illustrate production of cement and concrete showing their processes and how cement can be used for making concrete for construction purposes.

The two diagram illustrate production of cement and concrete showing their processes and how cement can be used for making concrete for construction purposes. LG306
The two diagram illustrate production of cement and concrete showing their processes and how cement can be used for making concrete for construction purposes. At the first stage, there is depicted process of manufacturing cement. First, limestone and clay have to be crashed, forming a powder, after that it is mixed together before being heated. Next step, is heating the powder and then grinding it and packing in the bags. The cement is ready now. At the right picture, there is production of concrete with usage of cement, 15%, water, 10%, sand, 25%, and small stones, (50%), to be exact. These products are placed together in the concrete mixer, which is moving clockwise. In summary, two diagrams show how cement is manufactured first and after used for producing concrete, which can be used for building reasons. Beginning with input of raw materials and ending with bags of finished product, after being mixed with four different materials and, in the end, producing concrete.
The two diagram illustrate production of
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cement
and concrete showing their processes and how
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cement
can be
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used
for making concrete for construction purposes.

At the
first
stage, there
is depicted
process of manufacturing
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cement
.
First
, limestone and clay
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have to
be crashed
, forming a powder, after that it
is mixed
together
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before
being heated
.
Next
step, is heating the powder and then grinding it and packing in the bags. The
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cement
is ready
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now
.

At the right picture, there is production of concrete with usage of
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cement
, 15%, water, 10%, sand, 25%, and
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small
stones, (50%), to be exact. These products
are placed
together in the concrete mixer, which is moving clockwise.

In summary, two diagrams
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show
how
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cement
is manufactured
first
and after
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used
for producing concrete, which can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for building reasons. Beginning with input of raw materials and ending with bags of finished product, after
being mixed
with four
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different
materials and, in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
, producing concrete.

IELTS academic The two diagram illustrate production of cement and concrete showing their processes and how cement can be used for making concrete for construction purposes.

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