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The supplied bar chart illustrates the data about how much money the selected country had gained in different categories via export in the times covered by the question.

The supplied bar chart illustrates the data about how much money the selected country had gained in different categories via export in the times covered by the question. qk1od
The supplied bar chart illustrates the data about how much money the selected country had gained in different categories via export in the times covered by the question. Besides, the given table below provides information about the percentage change that represents each category of export compared to the previous year. Overall, what stands out from the bar chart and the tables is that one of the major and effective export revenue was petroleum products. Another interesting point is that the textiles category witnessed the highest increase in percentage over the one-year period. Looking at the details, as regards petroleum products, there was a slight rise (3%), which meant that it was still the first sector to earn a great deal of cash, 62 million dollars. With respect to textiles, although with growth by 15. 24%, this sector experienced the quickest increase between 2015 and 2016, it had the last place with agricultural products, which had seen the lowest growth in that period, in terms of this country gaining money in 2016. Additionally, these sectors' volume had reached to 31 million dollars in 2016. Regarding, gems and jewellery, the only sector, which there was a decline, we can witness is that the figures had gone down to 40% from 42%, respectively. Finally, it is noticeable that there was a considerable improvement (8, 5%) in engineered goods, with going up to 61 million dollars by 3 million dollars over the period in question.
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category witnessed the highest increase in percentage over the one-year period.

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, as regards petroleum products, there was a slight rise (3%), which meant that it was
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. With respect to textiles, although with growth by 15. 24%, this sector experienced the quickest increase between 2015 and 2016, it had the last place with agricultural products, which had
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the lowest growth in that period, in terms of this country gaining money in 2016.
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in 2016. Regarding, gems and
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sector, which there was a decline, we can witness is that the figures had gone down to 40% from 42%,
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, it is noticeable that there was a considerable improvement (8, 5%) in engineered
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over the period in question.
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