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The two column graphs present the information about destinations of graduates of one university: history and engineering faculties after the half-year making comparisons of two years.

The two column graphs present the information about destinations of graduates of one university: history and engineering faculties after the half-year making comparisons of two years. qyGr
The two column graphs present the information about destinations of graduates of one university: history and engineering faculties after the half-year making comparisons of two years. Overall, the number of graduates having job are high, however the unemployment rate of engineering students is relatively more. The amount of employed graduates of history department have insignificant difference in first and second years of 2%. In the year 1, there were 26 per cent of those who continued studying, while in the second year this index dropped till 24 per cent. Time out history graduates had no difference and remained at 5%, while only 3 and 2 per cents in first and second years of students were unemployed. The 75% of engineering alumnus were employed in first year. This number slightly increased till 77% in second year. Only 11% of students decided to study after graduation in year 1, and 7% in year 2. The minimum amount of graduates of this faculty were time out. During these two years this percentage of 1 were remained constant. The unemployed students in two years are relatively were the same in 10%.
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of one university: history and engineering faculties after the half-year making comparisons of two years.
Overall
, the number of
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graduates
having job are high,
however
the unemployment rate of engineering
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students
is
relatively
more.

The amount of employed
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graduates
of history department have insignificant difference in
first
and second years of 2%. In the
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year
1, there were 26 per cent of those who continued studying, while in the second
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this index dropped till 24 per cent. Time out history
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graduates
had no difference and remained at 5%, while
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3 and 2 per cents in
first
and second years of
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were unemployed
. The 75% of engineering alumnus
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first
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year
. This number
slightly
increased till 77% in second
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11% of
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decided to study after graduation in
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1, and 7% in
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2. The minimum amount of
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of this faculty were time out. During these two years this percentage of 1
were remained
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in two years are
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IELTS academic The two column graphs present the information about destinations of graduates of one university: history and engineering faculties after the half-year making comparisons of two years.

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