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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981,1991,and 2001.

The given pie charts show how much a UK school spent on different running costs in three separate years: 1981, 1991 and 2001. Overall, the expenditure on teachers’ salary were significantly more than that of insurance. By contrast, the total of resource e. g. books and Furniture and equipment showed a extremely similar data through three years. Besides, a continuous decrease can be seen in Other workers’ spending. It is noticed that there was a stable increase in the figure for teachers’ salary, which approximately accounted for half of the total school spending, at 40%, 50% and 45% respectively. In contrast, although a rise took place in insurance, the changes was far less significant, with the figure slightly ascending by merely 6%, growing from 2% to 8% by the end of 2001. The data about other Resource e. g. books and furniture and equipment were similar, with the average at 43. 5%. The largest spending of former occurred in 1991 and then dropped to the bottom at 9% while the percentage of former reached a high point in 2001 at 23%. Others workers’ salaries played less and less important role, declining by 13%.

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show
 how much a UK school spent on This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 running costs in three separate years: 1981, 1991 and 2001.

Overall
, the expenditure on teachers’ salary were significantly
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e. g.
 books and Furniture and equipment This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
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extremely
 similar data through three years. Besides
, a continuous decrease can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 in Other workers’ spending.

It is noticed
 that there was a stable increase in the figure for teachers’ salary, which approximately accounted for half of the total school spending, at 40%, 50% and 45% respectively
. In contrast
, although a rise took place in insurance, the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 was far less significant, with the figure slightly
 ascending by merely
 6%, growing from 2% to 8% by the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of 2001.

The data about other Resource There should be no space here: “e.g.”.e.g.
e. g.
 books and furniture and equipment were similar, with the average at 43. 5%. The largest spending of former occurred in 1991 and then dropped to the bottom at 9% while the percentage of former reached a high point in 2001 at 23%. Others workers’ salaries played less and less This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 role, declining by 13%. 

IELTS academic The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

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6.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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