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The technonly of getting energy from ocean waves.

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The design of the wave-energy machine and its location is illustrated in the diagram below. The technique works by taking energy from the water's waves and usually it is situated on the lakes, oceans, and rivers. The most important detail is the electricity generator and there are two machines, the first one for big waves and the second one is for little waves. The first step of work starts with wave direction and it increases the water levels. Because of this Air moves from the first chamber to the second chamber. After then the airflow moves the electricity generator and collects electricity from bacteria. The first wave-energy machine lies in the deepest place and it takes itself large waves. Respectively it works higher output than second. After then starts the turn of the second machine and it takes the small waves from the first machine. Respectively it earns low output.
The design of the wave-energy
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machine
and its location
is illustrated
in the diagram below.

The technique works by taking energy from the water's
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waves
and
usually
it
is situated
on the lakes, oceans, and rivers.
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The
most
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detail is the electricity generator and there are two
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machines
, the
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one for
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big
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waves
and the second one is for
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little
waves.

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step of work
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with
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direction and it increases the water levels.
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moves
from the
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chamber to the second chamber. After then the airflow
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moves
the electricity generator and collects electricity from bacteria.

The
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first
wave-energy
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machine
lies in the deepest place and it takes itself large
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waves
.
Respectively
it works higher output than second. After then
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the turn of the second
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and it takes the
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small
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from the
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it earns low output.

IELTS academic The technonly of getting energy from ocean waves.

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