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The tables illustrate about changes in temperature and hours in three days in London and Sydney in December 2018.

The tables illustrate about changes in temperature and hours in three days in London and Sydney in December 2018. E3kPR
The tables shows the main changes in temperature and hours in London also Sydney in December 2018. Overall, the temperature in Sydney was warmer than London, also a sunrise happened a bit earlier as well a sunset sank late than London. Looking to the main features, the highest temperature observed in Sydney max 29c and min 17c. However, these changes saw a significant increase in other 2days 28max-18min and 31 max-min 19c. Conversely, there were lowest changes in London. In first day, there was a drop in 9cmax min 4c, in other day changes rose slightly about max 13c min 3c but 30 th December it declined again 10c and min 5c. Looking changes in sunset and sunrise, there were the same sunrise 08: 06 but only one day it happened in o8: 05. However, sunset changed step by step 15: 57, 15: 58, 15: 59 in three days. Sunrise in Sydney changed the same as London, two days was steady 05: 45, other days it was in 05: 46. According to the sunset, first day it was 20: 06, and other two days showed the same changes 20: 07.
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in temperature and hours in London
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Sydney in December 2018.

Overall
, the temperature in Sydney was warmer than London,
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a sunrise happened a bit earlier
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well a
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sank late than London.

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min
17c.
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, these
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changes
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a significant increase in
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2days 28max-18min and 31 max-min 19c.
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, there were
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lowest
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in London. In
first
day, there was a drop in 9cmax
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4c, in
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day
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rose
slightly
about max 13c
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3c
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December it declined again 10c and
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5c.

Looking
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in
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and sunrise, there were the same sunrise 08: 06
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one day it happened in o8: 05.
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sunset
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step by step 15: 57, 15: 58, 15: 59 in three days. Sunrise in Sydney
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the same as London, two days was steady 05: 45,
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days it was in 05: 46. According to the
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,
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day it was 20: 06, and
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two days
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20: 07.
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IELTS academic The tables illustrate about changes in temperature and hours in three days in London and Sydney in December 2018.

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