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Chart shows Students participation in different recreation activities in 2015–2016 in particular university.

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The bar chart illustrates how many students participated in various recreational activities in one university varied in 2015 and 2016. The data is calibrated percentile. At the fleeting glance, in 2015, maximum number of learners took participate in cultural activities, which was 40%, followed by sports activities, accounting for 20%. Participation in dancing and pointing competition by students was almost equal which was 15%. Minimum number of children took participate in singing activities which was 10%. Probbing further, in 2016, majority of students participated in singing activities which was 40%. Respective figure was noticed for painting and sports activities, accounting for 16% and 14%. Dancing was the second most popular activity among students, about half than that of singing. Overall, it is apparent that participation by students was highest in cultural events while, lowest in dancing activities throughout the given time period.
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At the fleeting glance, in 2015, maximum number of learners took participate in cultural
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, which was 40%, followed by sports
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, accounting for 20%. Participation in dancing and pointing competition by
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was almost equal which was 15%. Minimum number of children took participate in singing
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which was 10%.

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, about half than that of singing.

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