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the tables below show average yearly temperature and rainfall for two cities in Australia

the tables below show average yearly temperature and rainfall for two cities in Australia e3e8V

The table gives an overview of weather in two cities of Australia on an annually basics especially; January, April, July and October. Overall, it is obvious that Brisbane is much hotter and has more rainy days than Melbourne over the whole period. Regarding with summer, first of all, the most noticeable feature is that the temperature reaches the peak in January in both with 29 degree Celsius and 26 degree Celsius respectively. Furthermore, the coolest month in Brisbane is July with 11 degree Celsius; similarly, it is also the lowest average temperature in Melbourne by 4 degree Celsius. What stands out here is that in the remaining two months (April and October) the climates are nearly the same in Brisbane and Melbourne. Alternatively, we can see that the peak of mean rainfall of the year are January and April which has 169mm and 86mm in Brisbane as well as April and October in Melbourne, contributing 57mm and 67mm respectively. Although Brisbane is wetter than Melbourne, Melbourne has 15 rainy days in July whereas 14 days in Brisbane in January. Finally, another interesting point is that the raining time in Brisbane never drops than 8 days compared with 7 days in Melbourne.

The table gives an overview of weather in two cities of Australia on an You used an adverb ('annually') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('basics') instead of another adjective.
annually basics
especially
; January, April, July and October.

Overall
, it is obvious that Brisbane is much hotter and has more rainy days than Melbourne over the whole period.

Regarding with summer, This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".first
first of all
, the most noticeable feature is that the temperature reaches the peak in January in both with 29 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtermstrengthseverityratepointgrade
degree
 Celsius and 26 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtermstrengthseverityratepointgrade
degree
 Celsius respectively
. Furthermore
, the coolest month in Brisbane is July with 11 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtermstrengthseverityratepointgrade
degree
 Celsius; similarly
, it is also
 the lowest average temperature in Melbourne by 4 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtermstrengthseverityratepointgrade
degree
 Celsius. What stands out here is that in the remaining two months (April and October) the climates are nearly
 the same in Brisbane and Melbourne.

Alternatively
, we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 that the peak of mean rainfall of the year are January and April which has Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "169 mm"169 mm
169mm
 and Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "86 mm"86 mm
86mm
 in Brisbane as well
 as April and October in Melbourne, contributing Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "57 mm"57 mm
57mm
 and Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "67 mm"67 mm
67mm
respectively
. Although Brisbane is wetter than Melbourne, Melbourne has 15 rainy days in July whereas 14 days in Brisbane in January. Finally
, another interesting point is that the raining time in Brisbane never drops than 8 days compared with 7 days in Melbourne. 