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The given diagrams illustrate the two structure of the centre of a small town named Islip.One of the first structure shows the current map of the town,while another one gives the information of plans for its developement in the future.

The given diagrams illustrate the two structure of the centre of a small town named Islip. One of the first structure shows the current map of the town, while another one gives the information of plans for its developement in the future. x025b
The given diagrams illustrate the two structure of the centre of a small town named Islip. One of the first structure shows the current map of the town, while another one gives the information of plans for its developement in the future. Overall, mainly in the present day bus station, car parking and the road for pedestrains are missing in the centre of the town. However, these facilities are planning to add in planned development of this place. There are also going to bulid a dual carriageway in the city. The first diagram clearly shows in the present day the main road lies between both side of the shops and school is situated in the south side of the centre of the town. On the other hand, opposite side of the school they have the park. Housing is in the middle of the school and the park. Whereas, in the development of the city there are few things which they are going to add in the town. Bus station, car parking, shopping centre and new housing plans they are implementing in the centre. Meanwhile, there is also a plan of the development of dual carriageway in the town.
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Islip
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map of the
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developement
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mainly
in the present day bus station, car parking and the road for
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pedestrains
are missing in the
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centre
of the
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.
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, these facilities are planning to
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add
in planned development of this place. There are
also
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a dual carriageway in the city.

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shows
in the present day the main road lies between both side of the shops and school
is situated
in the south side of the
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centre
of the
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.
On the other hand
, opposite side of the school they have the park. Housing is in the middle of the school and the park.

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, in the development of the city there are few things which they are going to
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add
in the
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town
. Bus station, car parking, shopping
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centre
and new housing plans they are implementing in the
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centre
. Meanwhile, there is
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a plan of the development of dual carriageway in the
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IELTS academic The given diagrams illustrate the two structure of the centre of a small town named Islip. One of the first structure shows the current map of the town, while another one gives the information of plans for its developement in the future.

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