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The tables and pie chart show in percentage terms the results of a new shopping complex in Auckland,New Zealand.

The tables and pie chart show in percentage terms the results of a new shopping complex in Auckland, New Zealand. 9L5r7
The tables and pie chart illustrates the result of observation of a new shopping mall in Auckland, New Zealand. The scale is in percentage. To begin with, the number of males shoppers who satisfied with shops were 62% and female shoppers were 9% more than that which were 71% satisfied with shops. Male and female did not satisfied with shops were same 20%. However the male shoppers were 18% not given their review which was doubled then femal. Apart from that 80% of male Shoppers and 59% of female shoppers were satisfied with the restaurants. Total 26% of male and female not satisfied with restaurant. On the other hand, 15%male shoppers and 20% female Shoppers not give their comments. Moreover in shopping 79% people satisfied with design in which 17% of people were very satisfied and 10% people not satisfied with it. In contrast 11% people did not given their review about design. Overall, more number of female satisfied with Shopping Complex and high rate of male not given their review.
The tables and pie chart illustrates the result of observation of a new shopping mall in Auckland, New Zealand. The scale is in percentage.

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female
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with the restaurants. Total 26% of male and
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IELTS academic The tables and pie chart show in percentage terms the results of a new shopping complex in Auckland, New Zealand.

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