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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009. The table demonstrates the difference between four types of Secondary School. Three schools are display diminish in percentage while community schools are increase experience raised. Grammar schools are dropped in half from 24% percentage in 2000 to 12% percentage in 2009. the specialist schools of pupils attending were down by fewer amount moreover, Whilst the other groups are reduce was significantly it was contrary to community schools
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the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary
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Types Between 2000 and 2009.

The table demonstrates the difference between four types of Secondary School.

Three
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are display diminish in percentage while community
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are increase experience raised.

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are dropped
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specialist
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of pupils attending were down by fewer amount

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IELTS academic The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

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