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The table shows the number of the registration of five different kinds of vehicles in Australia during three separated years (2010, 2012, and 2014)

The table shows the number of the registration of five different kinds of vehicles in Australia during three separated years (2010, 2012, and 2014) Ow5mN
The table shows the number of the registration of five different kinds of vehicles in Australia during three separated years (2010, 2012, and 2014) As is observed, what stands out from the table is that all of the vehicles types had increased significantly over the period. In addition, the percentage of motorcycles had the biggest change from 2012 to 2014. Even though, the figure relating to the passenger vehicles type was the highest in three years. In 2010, 11. 8 million passenger vehicles were registered, while the figure for commercial ones was significantly lower at only 2. 3 million. Over the following four years, the number of passenger vehicles rose by 10. 2% to 13 million, whereas there were 0. 4 million more commercial vehicles registered, a rise of 17. 4%. Turning to the remaining types of vehicles, the greatest increase was recorded for motorcycles, which grew from 540, 000 registered in 2010 to 709, 000 in 2014, an increase of 30. 8%. During the same period, the numbers of heavy trucks and light trucks registered also rose, by 8. 3% and 23. 5%, respectively.
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in Australia during three separated years (2010, 2012, and 2014)

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vehicles
types had increased
significantly
over the period.
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from 2012 to 2014.
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, the figure relating to the passenger
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type was the highest in three years.

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passenger
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were
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, while the figure for commercial ones was
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2. 3
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. Over the following four years, the number of passenger
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rose by 10. 2% to 13
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, whereas there were 0. 4
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more commercial
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vehicles
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, a rise of 17. 4%.

Turning to the remaining types of
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, the greatest increase
was recorded
for motorcycles, which grew from 540, 000
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registered
in 2010 to 709, 000 in 2014, an increase of 30. 8%. During the same period, the numbers of heavy trucks and light trucks
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registered
also
rose, by 8. 3% and 23. 5%,
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The table shows the number of the registration of five different kinds of vehicles in Australia during three separated years (2010, 2012, and 2014)

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