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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. v.3

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. v. 3
The supplied table gives data provided by the United Nations on the 4 major social and economic indicators of four countries for the year 1994. As is observed from the given data, Canada and Japan were two countries with really rich social and economic indications whereas Peru and Zaire were two countries where life expectancy and other social and economic factors were very poor in the year 1994. Canada and Japan had both 99% adult literacy rate and their life expectancy was more than 75. Besides, annual incomes per person in these two countries were much higher, more than 11 thousand and 15 thousand respectively. Finally, the daily calorie supplies for the people of these 2 countries were more than 3300 and 2800. Totally opposite scenarios can be observed in Peru and Zaire. The latter two countries had only 68% and 34% adult literates and the life expectancy was much less than the previous two countries. Finally, the calorie supply per person and life expectancy was significantly less in these two countries. These indicators show a poor living standard in these two countries. In summary, Canada and Japan both had a rich life standard while it was very poor in Peru and Zaire.
The supplied table gives data provided by the United Nations on the 4 major social and economic indicators of four
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countries
for the year 1994. As
is observed
from the
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data, Canada and Japan were two
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countries
with
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rich social and economic indications whereas Peru and Zaire were two
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countries
where
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life
expectancy and other social and economic factors were
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very
poor in the year 1994.

Canada and Japan had both 99% adult literacy rate and their
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life
expectancy was more than 75.
Besides
, annual incomes per person in these two
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countries
were much higher, more than 11 thousand and 15 thousand
respectively
.
Finally
, the daily calorie supplies for the
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people
of these 2
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countries
were more than 3300 and 2800.
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opposite scenarios can
be observed
in Peru and Zaire. The latter two
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countries
had
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only
68% and 34% adult literates and the
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life
expectancy was much less than the previous two
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countries
.
Finally
, the calorie supply per person and
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life
expectancy was
significantly
less in these two
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countries
. These indicators
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show
a poor living standard in these two countries.

In summary, Canada and Japan both had a rich
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life
standard while it was
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very
poor in Peru and Zaire.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. v. 3

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