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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. 05p9
The table compares data regarding systems of underground railway among some large cities in terms of date opened, length of route and numbers and annually passengers Overall, the longest railway was constructed in London as well as it was the earliest one. The largest amount of people use usually underground as a means of transport in Tokyo compared to other countries. In London, the underground was bestowed for the first time to the public to utilize in 1863 and its length is 394 km, that is nearly two times longer in comparison with Paris's. The underground railway system of Tokyo, which is 155 km in total, was opened in 1927 and average users for each year are 1928 million, about 13 times larger than Washington Dc where has 29 km shorter route. The railway systems started their activity in 1981 in Kyoto and own only 11km routes. Annual possengers of underground in Kyoto and Los Angeles are almost same, 45 and 50 million, respectively.
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system of Tokyo, which is 155 km in total,
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in Kyoto and Los Angeles are almost same, 45 and 50 million,
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IELTS academic The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

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