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The table of data shows the bicycle shop's actual sales and the forecasted sales

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The table of data represents the bicycle shop's actual sales and the predicted sales for the first quarter of the year. Overall, it is quite evident that the actual sales performed poorly compared to the forecasting. Meanwhile, there were few months when certain elements outdid the prediction. There was an introduction of hires in March and April. The trend presented in the table shows that clothing was something that constantly saw a drop compared to the expectations, In January itself it saw a drop of $2150 landing to income of $2350, Overall it was expected to make an income of $21000 but ended up at only $10, 350. On the Contrary, Repairs saw an up rise at every point. Comparing to the above trends, New bicycles and Spare parts showed a mixed data. The first one saw an up rise in Feb and the others had a drop, it showed an increased sales of $440 in Feb then the expectations. The second one saw an income of $800 more than that was forecasted. Although, the other months did not see the same trend. Moreover, there was an addition of repairs in March and April which contributed $1950.
The table of data represents the bicycle shop's actual
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and the predicted
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for the
first
quarter of the year.
Overall
, it is quite evident that the actual
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sales
performed
poorly
compared to the forecasting. Meanwhile, there were few months when certain elements outdid the prediction. There was an introduction of hires in March and April. The trend presented in the table
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shows
that clothing was something that
constantly
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a drop compared to the expectations, In January itself it
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a drop of $2150 landing to income of $2350,
Overall
it was
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expected
to
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an income of $21000
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ended up at
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$10, 350.
On the Contrary
, Repairs
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an up rise at every point. Comparing to the above trends, New bicycles and Spare parts
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showed
a mixed data. The
first
one
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an up rise in Feb and the others had a drop, it
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an increased
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sales
of $440 in Feb then the expectations. The second one
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an income of $800 more than that
was forecasted
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the same trend.
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, there was an addition of repairs in March and April which contributed $1950.
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