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digram showing process of sugar from sugarcane

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Steps involved in making sugar is shown in the given diagram. Overall, preparation of sugar involves eight steps which starts with sugarcane harvest and ends up with delivery of sugar to supermarkets and restaurants. In the first step, sugarcane harvest takes place in tropical regions after that uses collected by crusher. Next, the juice is partially filtered to collector or sugar which is shipped to Germany for more processing. When this material reaches Germany, it passes through melting and filtering stage where purification as done completely. Sugar after melting takes form of sugar syrup which transforms into crystals in the fifth stage. Subsequently, these crystals are dried at sixth stage by using fans. After completion of these steps sugar is packed and deliver to supermarkets and restaurants.
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Steps
involved in making
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sugar
is shown
in the
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given
diagram.

Overall
, preparation of
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sugar
involves eight
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steps
which
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starts
with sugarcane harvest and ends up with delivery of
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sugar
to supermarkets and restaurants. In the
first
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step
, sugarcane harvest takes place in tropical regions after that
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uses
collected by crusher.
Next
, the juice is
partially
filtered to collector or
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sugar
which
is shipped
to Germany for more processing. When this material reaches Germany, it passes through melting and filtering stage where purification as done completely.

Sugar after melting takes form of
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sugar
syrup which transforms into crystals in the fifth stage.
Subsequently
, these crystals
are dried
at sixth stage by using fans. After completion of these
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steps
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sugar
is packed
and deliver to supermarkets and restaurants.
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IELTS academic digram showing process of sugar from sugarcane

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
127 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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