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The information about the consumption of junk food by Australian youngsters from 1975 to 2000

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The information about the consumption of junk food by Australian youngsters from 1975 to 2000 is depicted by line graph. From Overall perspective, it readily apparent that expect the fish and chips, other type of food showed upward trend in given time period. Looking into details, Starting from 100 times per year in 1975. The consumption of fish and chips rapidly declined and stood at 85 times per year in 1980. Before going to reach at dip the number of times eaten per year of fish and chips, it accounted for 90 times per year. I’m last year fish and chips stable at 40 times per year. The pizza and hamburger both started from 10 times per year in 1990. Moving further, in next 5 years, both are experienced constant growth. In 1985, pizza stand on 40 times eaten per year. While Hamburg recorded 100 times per year. There was only 20 times per year difference between hamburger and pizza in final year. The consumption of hamburger two fold in last year, the figure of pizza(80 times per year)
The information about the consumption of junk food by Australian youngsters from 1975 to 2000
is depicted
by line graph.

From
Overall
perspective, it
readily
apparent that
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expect
the fish and chips, other type of food
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showed
upward trend in
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given
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time
period.

Looking into
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details
, Starting from 100
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times
per
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year
in 1975. The consumption of fish and chips
rapidly
declined and stood at 85
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times
per
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year
in 1980.
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Before
going to reach at dip the number of
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times
eaten per
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year
of fish and chips, it accounted for 90
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times
per
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year
. I’m last
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year
fish and chips stable at 40
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times
per
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year
. The pizza and hamburger both
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started
from 10
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year
in 1990.

Moving
further
, in
next
5 years, both
are experienced
constant growth. In 1985, pizza stand on 40
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times
eaten per
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year
.
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While
Hamburg recorded 100
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per
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year
. There was
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only
20
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times
per
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year
difference between hamburger and pizza in final
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year
. The consumption of hamburger
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two fold
in last
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year
, the figure of pizza(80
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IELTS academic The information about the consumption of junk food by Australian youngsters from 1975 to 2000

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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