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The table illustrates the proportion of women working as a senior management position in three different companies from 1975 to 2015.

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The table illustrates the proportion of women working as a senior management position in three different companies from 1975 to 2015. Overall, number of women working as a senior managerial level in Eldan and Bamforth LTD companies was increasing throughout the 50 years period. In contrast, Finsbury LTD percentage was changing every 5 years. It can be clearly seen that Eldan and Bamforth were two companies who displays a steady increasing figures from the beginning of the period till 2015. In 1975 and 1980, Eldan LTD got a similar data of 3%, then after 5 years they experienced more than threefold of women staff, and consistently rose at the final year, who made up the biggest percentage of 64% compared to other companies. Similarly, Banforth LTD starting year got 9% and gradually increased with average of 2% every 5 years from year 1980 to 2000. However, in 2015 it shows a huge growth of 46%. Looking at Finsbury LTD, the percentage of women participated varies, it has relatively little changes about 5% over 50 years. In 1975, despite more women were working in the company accounted as 16%; Finsbury LTD Company ended up the less number of women working in the position which has 26% in the final year.
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from 1975 to 2015.

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LTD
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LTD percentage was changing every 5 years.

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staff, and
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rose at the final
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, who made up the biggest percentage of 64% compared to other
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.
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9% and
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1980 to 2000.
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accounted as 16%;
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ended up the less number of
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IELTS academic The table illustrates the proportion of women working as a senior management position in three different companies from 1975 to 2015.

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