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The table illustrates the information of four various academy visited by pupils between 2000 and 2009.

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The table illustrates the information of four various academy visited by pupils between 2000 and 2009. In detail, voluntary-controlled institute had a highest ratio of 52% one time more than that of grammer school in 2002. On the other hand, specialist school and community school both of them had a similar percentage. In 2005, grammer education system had a ratio of 19% half of the voluntery-controlled. In fact, community school had a proportion of pupil attending was 32%. In spite of specialists schools had ratio of 11%. In the last list of table. It is evident the community school had a fantastic rate of percentage in 2009. Only 20% student of volunteers is arrived and 12% of grammar schools. The specialist school had slightly less than grammar school 10%
The table illustrates the information of four various
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academy
visited by pupils between 2000 and 2009. In detail, voluntary-controlled institute had
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a
highest ratio of 52% one time more than that of
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grammer
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school
in 2002.
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, specialist
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school
and community
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school
both of them had a similar percentage. In 2005,
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grammer
education system had a ratio of 19% half of the
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voluntery-controlled
. In fact, community
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school
had a proportion of pupil attending was 32%.
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In
spite of specialists
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schools
had ratio of 11%.
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In
the last list of table. It is evident the community
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school
had a fantastic rate of percentage in 2009.
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Only
20% student of volunteers
is arrived
and 12% of grammar
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schools
. The specialist
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school
had
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less than grammar
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10%
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IELTS academic The table illustrates the information of four various academy visited by pupils between 2000 and 2009.

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