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The table illustrates the amount of money spent on three categories in four different countries namely China, Thailand, Japan, and Vietnam in the year 2008.

The table illustrates the amount of money spent on three categories in four different countries namely China, Thailand, Japan, and Vietnam in the year 2008. o691w
The table illustrates the amount of money spent on three categories in four different countries namely China, Thailand, Japan, and Vietnam in the year 2008. Overall, it can be seen that while the figures for spending on fast food /drinks reached the highest point, the opposite was true for that of leisure activities and education. It is also notable that the percentage of shoes/watches consumed was the most popular in China. As can be seen from the table, the proportions of fast food/drinks and shoes/watches consumed in China peak at 28. 91% and 16. 23%. Japan was the second, account for 18. 8% and 5. 51%. The percentage of fast food/drinks in Thailand (16. 36%) was slightly higher than that in Vietnam (15. 77%). Besides, the figures for shoes/watches in Thailand, Japan and Vietnam were roughly similar, with 5. 93%, 5. 51% and 5. 4% respectively. In 2008, only 1. 98% of the money was spent on leisure activities/education in Japan, it was three-fifths of that in Vietnam. The proportion of leisure activities/education in China was lower than that in Thailand, with 2. 21% and 3. 2%.
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Japan
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seen
that while the figures for spending on
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fast
food /drinks reached the highest point, the opposite was true for that of leisure activities and education. It is
also
notable that the percentage of shoes/
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watches
consumed was the most popular in China.

As can be
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seen
from the table, the proportions of
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fast
food/drinks and shoes/
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watches
consumed in China peak at 28. 91% and 16. 23%.
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Japan
was the second, account for 18. 8% and 5. 51%. The percentage of
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fast
food/drinks in Thailand (16. 36%) was
slightly
higher than that in Vietnam (15. 77%).
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, the figures for shoes/
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watches
in Thailand,
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Japan
and Vietnam were roughly similar, with 5. 93%, 5. 51% and 5. 4%
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In 2008,
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1. 98% of the money
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, it was three-fifths of that in Vietnam. The proportion of leisure activities/education in China was lower than that in Thailand, with 2. 21% and 3. 2%.
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IELTS academic The table illustrates the amount of money spent on three categories in four different countries namely China, Thailand, Japan, and Vietnam in the year 2008.

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