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The chart illustrates the proportions of people who spent on various items in 4 different countries in the year 2008.

The chart illustrates the proportions of people who spent on various items in 4 different countries in the year 2008. 0peB5
The chart illustrates the proportions of people who spent on various items in 4 different countries in the year 2008. Overall it can be seen that/ it is clear that fast food and drinks were the most popular in 4 different countries while the opposite was true for the percentages of leisure activities and education. Also, China has the highest percentage of consumer spending on shoes and watches. With regard to the highest expenditures, the percentage of consumer who spent on fast food and drinks in China stood at 28, 91%. The second top nation was Japan, with 18, 8%. This was followed by Thailand and Vietnam stood at 16, 36% and 15, 77% respectively. On the other hand, 16, 23% was the highest amount consumed on shoes and watches by Chinese whereas Thailand, Japan and finally Vietnam was more than 5% approximately. In term of the lowest expenditures, Japan had the proportion of consumer spending on leisure activities and education stood, at 1, 98% while the percentages of people in Vietnam and Thailand accounted for 3, 2% approximately and the last nation was China stood at 2, 21%.
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of leisure activities and education.
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of consumer spending on shoes and
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watches
.

With regard to the highest expenditures, the
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percentage
of consumer who spent on
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food and drinks in China
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at 28, 91%. The second top nation was Japan, with 18, 8%. This
was followed
by Thailand and Vietnam
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at 16, 36% and 15, 77%
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.
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, 16, 23% was the highest amount consumed on shoes and
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watches
by Chinese whereas Thailand, Japan and
finally
Vietnam was more than 5% approximately.

In term of the lowest expenditures, Japan had the proportion of consumer spending on leisure activities and education
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, at 1, 98% while the
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of
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in Vietnam and Thailand accounted for 3, 2% approximately and the last nation was China
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at 2, 21%.
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IELTS academic The chart illustrates the proportions of people who spent on various items in 4 different countries in the year 2008.

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