Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The graph shows the global sales of digital games.

The graph shows the global sales of digital games. XEKp8
looking at the graph, sales of handhold games was at the peak in every year among others in 2003 and 2004 it was sold at almost $16 billion. However, in other remaining years these games sold about 12 billion dollars. The sales of console games was below 6 billion dollars during 6year period which was almost half than that of hand hold games. In case of online games, sales begin in 2001 and inclined by 2 billion each year and reached the peak of 12 billion which was 11 Times more than beginning period. Further more, mobile phone games were purchased by masses only in last these years by sending 4, 6 and 8 billion dollars globally in 2003, 2004 and 2005 respectively. Overall, it is manifest that sales of handhold games was maximum while, online games were purchased half than handhold games, throughout the period.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
looking
at the graph,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sales
of handhold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
was at the peak in every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
among others in 2003 and 2004 it
was sold
at almost $16
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
.
However
, in other remaining years these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
sold about 12
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
dollars. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sales
of console
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
was below 6
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
dollars during
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
6year
period which was almost half than that of hand hold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
. In case of online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sales
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
in 2001 and inclined by 2
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
and reached the peak of 12
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
which was 11 Times more than beginning period.
Further
more, mobile phone
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
by masses
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
in last these years by sending 4, 6 and 8
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
dollars globally in 2003, 2004 and 2005
respectively
.

Overall
, it is manifest that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sales
of handhold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
was maximum while, online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
half than handhold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
, throughout the period.

IELTS academic The graph shows the global sales of digital games.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
146 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The graph shows the global sales of digital games.