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The graphic below shows how one year of coronavirus deaths compares to the leading causes of death in 2019.

The graphic below shows how one year of coronavirus deaths compares to the leading causes of death in 2019. yR9YD
The bar chart compares the number of people dead because of coronavirus with other diseases in 2019. It is noticeable that ischaemic heart disease, stroke, chronic obstructive pulmonary disease, trachea, bronchus, lung cancers, Alzheimer's disease and other dementias, and diabetes mellitus are non-communicable diseases. Meanwhile, COVIS-19, lower respiratory infections, neonatal conditions and diarrhoeal diseases are communicable diseases. As can be seen from the diagram, the number of people who died due to ischaemic heart disease was 8. 8 million. At the same time, this figure for stroke was lower, at 6. 2 million. In addition, chronic obstructive pulmonary disease led to 3. 2 million deaths in 2009. In the meantime, the figures for deaths because of the trachea, bronchus, lung cancers; Alzheimer's disease and other dementias; and diabetes mellitus were 1. 8 million, 1. 6 million, and 1. 5 million respectively. According to the diagram, the number of people dead by COVID-19 from Mar of 2020 to Mar of 2021 was 2. 7 million. In terms of lower respiratory infections, this figure was 1 million lower than that of COVID-19. With regard to neonatal conditions, the number of deaths by this type of disease was 2. 0 million. Regarding diarrhoeal diseases, this number was much lower, at 1. 5 million. A cursory glance at the diagram is enough to make it clear that ischaemic heart disease caused the highest number of deaths. Another thing to add is that the number of people dying due to diarrhoeal diseases and diabetes mellitus was similar in 2009.
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