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The table gives data about the figure for awards which were won by ten countries in the London 2021 Olympic Games

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The table gives data about the figure for awards which were won by ten countries in the London 2021 Olympic Games. The table gives data about the figure for medals that were won by ten countries in the London 2021 Olympic Games. 46 gold medals, 58 silver and bronze medals.  It was the highest number of medals on this table.  On the other hand, Hungary was the lowest rank of total medals.  It had only eight golds, four silver, and five bronzes which were lower many times than the US and half the figure for total Australia's medals and France's medals.  The rank of the second correctly was China with 88 total medals which doubled that the awards of Germany;  followed by Russia with 82 Olympic medals.  There were two nations that had the same figure for total medals, that was South Korea and Italy, they had 28 medals.  Followed the table, Germany & France had a similar number of gold medals with 11 medals;  Italy & Hungary had eight medals too.  Russia was the fourth in this group, but the country had the highest bronze medals number with 32 medals,  followed by 24 gold medals and 26 silver medals.  Although Russia won more medals than the UK, they were in 4th position because the UK participants won more gold medals which seem to have better points than silver and bronze medals at the top of the table. It is clear that there is a huge gap between Hungary and the US in the number of medals.
The table gives data about the figure for awards which
were won
 by ten countries in the London 2021 Olympic Games.

The table gives data about the figure for medals that
were won
 by ten countries in the London 2021 Olympic Games. 46 gold
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medals
, 58 silver and bronze
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medals
.  It was the highest number of medals on this table.  
On the other hand
, Hungary was the lowest rank of total medals.  It had
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eight golds, four silver, and five bronzes which were lower
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 times than the US and half the figure for total Australia's medals and France's medals.  The rank of the second 
correctly
was China with 88 total medals which doubled that the awards of Germany;
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followed by Russia with 82 Olympic medals.  There were two nations that had the same figure for total medals, that was South Korea and Italy, they had 28 medals.  Followed the table, Germany & France had a similar number of gold medals with
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11 medals
;
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Italy & Hungary had eight medals too.  Russia was the fourth in this group,
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the country had the highest bronze medals number with
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32 medals
,
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followed by 24 gold medals and 26 silver
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medals
.  Although Russia won more medals than the UK, they were in 4th position
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the UK participants won more gold medals which seem to have better points than silver and bronze medals at the top of the table.

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 that there is a huge gap between Hungary and the US in the number of medals.
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