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The bar chart illustrate the information about business graduates and engineering graduates what work doing after graduation. The data has been given in the percentage.

The bar chart illustrate the information about business graduates and engineering graduates what work doing after graduation. The data has been given in the percentage. p1DE3
Overall, it can be vividly manifested that the highest number of worked done by both categories. Whereas, the lowest trend followed by seeking work. In details, in the first year 60% employment work completed by trade graduates, while minor increase observed in second year which was approximately 68%. Apart from this, 30% further study continued by business graduates in both years, whilst nearly 10% education done by timeout in two years then, a dramatic went down noticed in seeking work which was 7%. Moving to the rest of the data, similar worker work continued by engineering graduates which was closely 75% in the first and second years. Moving ahead, in the first year nearly 11% further study done by engineering graduates and, it was decline 2% in both year. At the end of two years approximately 8% to 10% seeking work done by engendering graduates.
Overall
, it can be
vividly
manifested that the highest number of worked done by both categories.
Whereas
, the lowest trend followed by seeking
work
. In
details
, in the
first
year
60% employment
work
completed by trade
graduates
, while minor increase observed in second
year
which was approximately 68%. Apart from this, 30%
further
study continued by business
graduates
in both years, whilst
nearly
10% education done by timeout in two years then, a dramatic went down noticed in seeking
work
which was 7%. Moving to the rest of the data, similar worker
work
continued by engineering
graduates
which was
closely
75% in the
first
and second years. Moving ahead, in the
first
year
nearly
11%
further
study done by engineering
graduates
and, it was decline 2% in both
year
. At the
end
of two years approximately 8% to 10% seeking
work
done by engendering
graduates
.
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