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The table gives data about passenger volumes reaching a station every 2 hours in a day, and also the average ticket cost at those times.

The table gives data about passenger volumes reaching a station every 2 hours in a day, and also the average ticket cost at those times. pRr0d
Passenger numbers peak 3 times during the day. For example, the number at 6am is 480, rising to 690 by 8am before falling again. There is then a peak of 700 at midday, followed by an afternoon decline to a low of 230 at 4pm. A third spike is at 6pm, reaching 670 before tailing off. The ticket prices partially follow this pattern. The 8am passenger surge is matched by a high price of $29, followed by a peak of $31 at midday and a decrease to $17 by 4pm. However, the 6pm spike in passenger numbers is accompanied by a low of $11 in prices, with a subsequent rise to $22 at 8pm and a final levelling off. In summary, ticket prices increase broadly in line with passenger traffic, except during the evening rush hour when they actually fall.
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numbers peak 3 times during the day.
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, the number at 6am is 480, rising to 690 by 8am
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falling again. There is then a peak of 700 at midday, followed by an afternoon decline to a low of 230 at 4pm. A third spike is at 6pm, reaching 670
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tailing off.

The ticket
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prices
partially
follow this pattern. The 8am
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surge
is matched
by a high
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price
of $29, followed by a peak of $31 at midday and a decrease to $17 by 4pm.
However
, the 6pm spike in
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passenger
numbers
is accompanied
by a low of $11 in
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prices
, with a subsequent rise to $22 at 8pm and a final levelling off.

In summary, ticket
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prices
increase
broadly
in line with
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passenger
traffic, except during the evening rush hour when they actually fall.

IELTS academic The table gives data about passenger volumes reaching a station every 2 hours in a day, and also the average ticket cost at those times.

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140 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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