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The diagram shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories{without children, with 1-2 children and with 3+ children}

The diagram shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories{without children, with 1-2 children and with 3+ children} pRr02
This bar graph illustrates the data of men and women deprived of weekly wages in various categories( without children, with 1-2 children, with 3+ children). The data is measured in hours. Overall, the women are paid more in comparison to men. Also, working hours of females keep on increasing in spite of having more children. On the contrary, the hours of males remain constant. In terms of workers without children, women work 10 hours per week more than men. Moreover, with 3+ children, women hit the highest point. Additionally, the average work of females with 3+ children is found to be double as compare to women without children. Moving further, regarding both workers having 1-2 children, there is a huge difference of 30 hours in their work. In case of each category, married men are working equally same hours, approximately 19 hours per week.
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deprived of weekly wages in various categories
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, with 1-2
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. The data
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Overall
, the
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, working
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hours
of females
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of males remain constant. In terms of workers without
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,
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work 10
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hours
per week more than
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men
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, with 3+
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,
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hit the highest point.
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, the average work of females with 3+
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is found
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without
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. Moving
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, regarding both workers having 1-2
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, there is a huge difference of 30
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in their work. In case of each category, married
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same
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories{without children, with 1-2 children and with 3+ children}

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