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Map shows two projected shopping malls for Brandfield.

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The main focus of the provided map is to demonstrate two possible sides (S1 and S2) for the city shopping center in Brandfield city. Overall, the first planned area (S1) is located in northern part of the city which is surrounded by the road, trainway, and river, while the second project is proposed to construct in the south-east. To be in detail, there a number of advantages of the first S1 projected place. As it is situated near to urban areas, the residence of housing estates and city center will be able to use it. There will be, however, some obstackles because of lack of roads which will make it harder to get in the market. As for the subsequent planned shopping building (S2), the main positive side of its position is being near to the main road and railway which enables it to do better services for citizens. Nevertheless, being remote from the main urban places will require to spend more time to reach it.
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focus of the provided map is to demonstrate two possible sides (S1 and S2) for the city shopping center in
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Brandfield
city.
Overall
, the
first
planned area (S1)
is located
in northern part of the city which
is surrounded
by the road,
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trainway
, and river, while the second project
is proposed
to construct in the south-east. To be in detail, there a number of advantages of the
first
S1 projected place. As it
is situated
near to urban areas, the residence of housing estates and city center will be able to
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use
it. There will be,
however
,
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obstackles
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because
of lack of roads which will
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make
it harder to
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get
in the market. As for the subsequent planned shopping building (S2), the
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main
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positive
side of its position is being near to the
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main
road and railway which enables it to do better services for citizens.
Nevertheless
, being remote from the
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main
urban places will require
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to spend
more time to reach it.

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