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The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. v.1

The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. v. 1
The table data lists down the top ten countries in the world with the highest number of internet users in the year 2016. It gives the number of people with access to the internet, the total population of the country and the percentage of people with internet access as of 2016. Overall, China had the highest internet users while the UK and Japan had the highest ratio of internet users. As is signified in the illustration, the population of China in 2016 was over 1. 3 billion and more than half of them had access to the internet. In terms of the number of internet users, China stood at the top of the list where India and the USA held the second and third positions respectively with over 462 million and 286 million internet users. Though India’s population was more than 1. 3 billion, only one-third of them were connected to the internet, unlike the USA where almost nine out of ten citizens used the internet. Brazil, Japan and Russia with more than 100 million netizens each (citizens who are connected to the internet) stood fourth till sixth positions. The UK and Mexico were at the bottom of the list with around 60 million netizens. However, the internet users’ ratio in the UK was highest, over 92% while it was the second highest in the USA.
The table data lists down the top ten countries in the world with the highest number of internet
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users
in the year 2016. It gives the number of
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people
with access to the internet, the total population of the country and the percentage of
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people
with internet access as of 2016.
Overall
, China had the highest internet
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users
while the UK and Japan had the highest ratio of internet users.

As
is signified
in the illustration, the population of China in 2016 was over 1. 3 billion and more than half of them had access to the internet. In terms of the number of internet
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users
, China stood at the top of the list where India and the USA held the second and third positions
respectively
with over 462
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million
and 286
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million
internet
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users
.
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India’s population was more than 1. 3 billion,
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only
one-third of them
were connected
to the internet, unlike the USA where almost nine out of ten citizens
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used
the internet. Brazil, Japan and Russia with more than 100
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million
netizens each (citizens who
are connected
to the internet) stood fourth till sixth positions. The UK and Mexico were at the bottom of the list with around 60
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million
netizens.
However
, the internet
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users’
ratio in the UK was highest, over 92% while it was the second highest in the USA.
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IELTS academic The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. v. 1

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6.0
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