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The table compares the proportion of pupils who have issues with seven academic challenges at two different schools in a period of 10 years.

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The table compares the proportion of pupils who have issues with seven academic challenges at two different schools in a period of 10 years. Overview, school A had more pupils who were struggling with educational issues than school B in 2005. After 10 years, the number of students at school A declined dramatically, whereas that at school B experienced the opposite trend. In 2005, the majority of students in school A found it hard to follow instructions and concentrate in lessons, with respective figures being 42% and 40%. 35% students in school A had problem with listening skills and verbal expression of ideas while that of school B was significantly lower, corresponding to 11% and 14%. This rate in spelling problem of school A was 30%, which was followed by handwriting and reading ability with the lowest percentage, at 22%. In school B, the percentages in the same field were much smaller, varied between 5% and 8%. After a period of 10 years, the proportion of students struggling reading and handwriting of both school witnessed a minor fluctuation. However, the number of pupils encountered by following instruction in school A fell to 8%, making it the lowest figure in the year while that of school B doubled in the same period. Similarly, school B experienced a 5% increase in the ratio of spelling, whereas that of school A recorded a fall of 5%. There was also a considerably reduction in the proportion of verbal expression of ideal and listening skill of school A, respectively 14% and 11% in 2015. Such a trend was not seen in the figures for its counterparts, which rose to 15% and 12%. Ok: >
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Overview,
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A had more pupils who were struggling with educational issues than
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B in 2005. After 10 years, the number of
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B experienced the opposite trend.

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to follow instructions and concentrate in lessons, with respective figures being 42% and 40%. 35%
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A had problem with listening
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while that of
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B was
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A was 30%, which
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B, the percentages in the same field were much smaller, varied between 5% and 8%.

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struggling reading and handwriting of both
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witnessed a minor fluctuation.
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A fell to 8%, making it the lowest figure in the year while that of
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B doubled in the same period.
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B experienced a 5% increase in the ratio of spelling, whereas that of
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A recorded a fall of 5%. There was
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IELTS academic The table compares the proportion of pupils who have issues with seven academic challenges at two different schools in a period of 10 years.

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