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The table chart illustrates the illustrate the information about traveling in match, June, September and December months by distinctive categories in 2002. The data has been given in the percentage.

The table chart illustrates the illustrate the information about traveling in match, June, September and December months by distinctive categories in 2002. The data has been given in the percentage. keqeR
From the overall, it can be vividly manifested that the highest commuting by business traveler in match months while, opposite trend followed by others. In detail, in March month business visitors were visit on trip nearly 73% whilst sharply decline observed to holiday visitors which was 18% then business travelers were 29% in June month. There had been a dramatic rose up seen for holidays it was 54%. Moreover, business travelers were fifty percent in September month. Whereas, there was sharply went down comprised in holidays it was near 30%. then in the December month business and holiday commuting were 34%to35% respectively. Moving to the rest of data, in march month only 6% families members were visit on trip. Nevertheless, other visitors were visited tiny chunk. Furthermore, family commuters were 13% in June then a large went down observed in others there was four percent. Nonetheless, family visitors were 11% in September it was large decline in others travelers which was approximately 5% at the end of month a large surged up noticed in family commuters which was 26% whereas dramatic went down seen others.
From the
overall
, it can be
vividly
manifested that the highest commuting by
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in match
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months
while, opposite trend followed by others. In detail, in March
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month
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business
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visitors
were
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visit
on trip
nearly
73% whilst
sharply
decline observed to
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holiday
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visitors
which was 18% then
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business
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travelers
were 29% in June
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month
. There had been a dramatic rose up
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seen
for
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holidays
it was 54%.
Moreover
,
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business
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travelers
were fifty percent in September
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month
.
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Whereas
, there was
sharply
went down comprised in
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holidays
it was near 30%.
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then
in the December
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month
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business
and
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holiday
commuting were 34%to35%
respectively
. Moving to the rest of data, in
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march
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month
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only
6%
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families
members were
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visit
on trip.
Nevertheless
,
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other
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visitors
were visited
tiny chunk.
Furthermore
,
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family
commuters were 13% in June then a large went down observed in others there was four percent. Nonetheless,
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family
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visitors
were 11% in September it was large decline in others
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travelers
which was approximately 5% at the
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end
of
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month
a large surged up noticed in
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family
commuters which was 26% whereas dramatic went down
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seen
others.

IELTS academic The table chart illustrates the illustrate the information about traveling in match, June, September and December months by distinctive categories in 2002. The data has been given in the percentage.

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185 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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