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Grange Park diagram in 1920 and now. Illustrates the changes ?

Grange Park diagram in 1920 and now. Illustrates the changes? Q2y2X
The given plans show how the Grange Park is transformed over the course of consecutive years by the effect of local developments. As it can be clearly shown from the diagram, Grange Park in the year 1920 was totally different that it looks now. In 1920, Grange Park had two entrances the north entrance and the south one from where the visitors can enter into the park. There was large fountain situated at the exact centre of park Along with it there was a stage for musicians. Along with the north entrance there were two Rose Gardens and seats for visitors and on the south entrance there was a rose garden and a Glasshouse. There was a pond were also there for water plants. On the contrary, now the park is fully transformed at present time there is a Rose Garden in the centre of the park which is also surrounded by the seats which are available for visitors for sitting. Now the park also includes a children’s play area and a café. There is also a Amphitheatre is presents for concerts.
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how the Grange
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is transformed
over the course of consecutive years by the effect of local developments.

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clearly
shown from the diagram, Grange
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Park
in the year 1920 was
totally
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different
that it looks
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now
. In 1920, Grange
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had two
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entrances
the north
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entrance
and the south one from where the visitors can enter into the
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park
. There was large fountain situated at the exact
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centre
of
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park
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entrance
there were two Rose Gardens and seats for visitors and on the south
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entrance
there was a rose garden and a Glasshouse. There was a pond were
also
there for water plants.

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,
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now
the
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park
is
fully
transformed at present time there is a Rose Garden in the
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centre
of the
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park
which is
also
surrounded by the seats which are available for visitors for sitting.
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Now
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includes a children’s play area and a café. There is
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Amphitheatre
is presents for concerts.
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IELTS academic Grange Park diagram in 1920 and now. Illustrates the changes?

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