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The graph below shows the use of solar energy in four different countries.

The graph below shows the use of solar energy in four different countries. NMo3m

The line chart display the expenditure of the Solar energy in four regins from 1995 till 2015. Overall, the use of sun power in USA and China increased dramatically. While in Japan the use decreased gradually and in Germany it remained relatively stable. In details, America accounted as the highest use of the power energy in the 20 years it increased from 8, 000 use to 18, 000. In 1995 Chaina's use were nearly 100, though it raised slightly in 2005 but in 2015 it increased dramatically. In the other hand, Japan decreased the use of it from 6, 000 to around 3, 989 uses. For the Germany there were some ups and downs in the time period but it remain stable overall.

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IELTS academic The graph below shows the use of solar energy in four different countries.

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American English

4 paragraphs

123 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 6.0

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