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The table belows show the unemployment rates in 2000 for men and women in different parts of the world

The table belows show the unemployment rates in 2000 for men and women in different parts of the world VYwxD
The proportion of jobless rates for two genders, such as female and male in various nationals was surveyed in 2000 is depicted in the table. Overall, it is evident that Morocco was the country whose percentage of unemployment individuals was ranked in the first whereas the opposite was true of Netherlands. As can be seen from the table given, the number of individuals who didn’t get a job in Morocco ranked in the first, with slightly over a fifth. With roughly 20% and over one in four of Male and Female, respectively. Additionally, the percentage of Belize accounted for a tiny minority while the rate of male was almost one-tenth, which was lower compared to that of female, with more than two in ten. As for Australia, the data of people who was in jobless situation made up just over 6%, which is twice as low as in Belize. To be more specific, there was a quite similar percentage being distributed on male and female, about over 6. 5%. By contrast, Japan was the country whose unemployment rates was lowest, just held a minuscule share. In addition, the percentage of jobless male and female was nearly 5% and 4. 5%, respectively.
The proportion of jobless rates for two genders, such as
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female
and male in various nationals
was surveyed
in 2000
is depicted
in the table.

Overall
, it is evident that Morocco was the country whose
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percentage
of unemployment individuals
was ranked
in the
first
whereas the opposite was true
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of Netherlands
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from the table
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, the number of individuals who didn’t
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a job in Morocco ranked in the
first
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a fifth. With roughly 20% and
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one in four of Male and
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Female
,
respectively
.
Additionally
, the
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of Belize accounted for a tiny minority while the rate of male was almost one-tenth, which was lower compared to that of
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female
, with more than two in ten.

As for Australia, the data of
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people
who was in jobless situation made up
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just
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over
6%, which is twice as low as in Belize. To be more specific, there was a quite similar
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percentage
being distributed
on male and
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female
, about
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over
6. 5%. By contrast, Japan was the country whose unemployment rates was lowest,
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held a minuscule share.
In addition
, the
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percentage
of jobless male and
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female
was
nearly
5% and 4. 5%,
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The table belows show the unemployment rates in 2000 for men and women in different parts of the world

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