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The pie charts display information about the percentage of three group of ages in Yemen and Italy, in 2000 and future projections in 2050.

The pie charts display information about the percentage of three group of ages in Yemen and Italy, in 2000 and future projections in 2050. p1Kd2
The pie charts display information about the percentage of three group of ages in Yemen and Italy, in 2000 and future projections in 2050. Generally, the vast majority of population in Yemen came from age 0-14 years in 2000. However, in future prediction, the age 15-59 years will reaching a vast majority in this country. on the other hand, Italia with the most of population it came from age 15-59 years for during this period. Following this, in Yemen, it clearly the most population it came from 0-14 years with slightly more than a half (50. 1%) in 2000. While group of age 15-59 years less than a half (46. 3%) and the minority group with 3. 6% was 60+ years. However, this situation was predicted to changed in 2050. The prediction in 2050, the first majority group of ages in Yemen from 15-59 years old accounted increased drastically for more than a half (57. 3%) whereas the group 0-14 years decreased significantly just by more than a third (37%). On the contrary, in 2000, the most group of ages as a majority in Italia made by 0-14 and 15-59 years old by more than 70%. The first position was group of 15-59 years old by nearly a half (61. 6%). While 0-14 years accounted for 14. 3% and lastly, 60+ accounted bu 24. 1%. Nevertheless, the condition will change in 2050. The number of ages 15-59 fell sharply by 46. 2% whereas group of ages 60+ accounted for 42. 3%. Lastly, there is tiny drop for group 0-14 years old by 11. 5%.
The pie charts display information about the percentage of three
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of
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ages
in Yemen and Italy, in 2000 and future projections in 2050.

Generally
, the vast
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majority
of population in Yemen came from
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age
0-14 years in 2000.
However
, in future prediction, the
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age
15-59 years will reaching a vast
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majority
in this country.
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on
the other hand,
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Italia
with the
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most of population
it came from
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age
15-59 years for during this period.

Following this, in Yemen, it
clearly
the most population it came from 0-14 years with
slightly
more than a
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half
(50. 1%) in 2000.
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While
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of
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age
15-59 years less than a
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half
(46. 3%) and the minority
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group
with 3. 6% was 60+ years.
However
, this situation
was predicted
to
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changed
in 2050. The prediction in 2050, the
first
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majority
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group
of
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ages
in Yemen from 15-59 years
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old
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accounted
increased
drastically
for more than a
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half
(57. 3%) whereas the
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0-14 years decreased
significantly
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by more than a third (37%).

On the contrary
, in 2000, the most
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of
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as a
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in
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made by 0-14 and 15-59 years
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by more than 70%. The
first
position was
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of 15-59 years
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by
nearly
a
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half
(61. 6%). While 0-14 years
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for 14. 3% and
lastly
, 60+
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accounted
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24. 1%.
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, the condition will
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change
in 2050. The number of
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15-59 fell
sharply
by 46. 2% whereas
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of
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60+
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accounted
for 42. 3%.
Lastly
, there is tiny drop for
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0-14 years
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by 11. 5%.
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