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the table below shows the salaries of secondry school

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The table depicts information about wages of secondary school teachers in 2009. In Australia starting pays was 28000, but 15 years salary was increased by 48, 000 and the maximum wages were 48000. The period of reached to maximum salary was 9 years. In Denmark, starting salary is 45000. However, after 15 years amount were increased to 54, 000 and reached to maximum amount was 54, 000. The tutor has reached their maximum wages at a period of 8 years. Luxembourg teachers starting earnings were 80, 000 and increased after 15 years was 119, 000. The maximum payout earned by Luxembourg educators was 132, 000 and reached a maximum payout spell maximum of 30years. Japan trainer earn starting amount was 34, 000. However, Japan masters payout not more than 65, 000 after 15 years, but tutor was reached their maximum wages were 86, 000. 37 years period taken by the tutor to reached their maximum payout was 37 years. Korean mentors starting wages 30, 000 and reached 48, 000 after 15 years. Maximum amount earned by the Korean tutor was 62, 000 and discovered maximum salary in 34 years. Overall, Australia was very low amount pay their teachers and Luxembourg one the country they pay out more than other countries.
The table depicts information about wages of secondary school teachers in 2009.

In Australia starting pays was 28000,
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15 years
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by 48, 000 and the maximum wages were 48000. The period of
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to maximum
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was 9 years. In Denmark, starting
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is 45000.
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, after 15 years
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to 54, 000 and
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to maximum
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was 54, 000. The
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has
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their maximum wages at a period of 8 years.
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Luxembourg teachers
starting earnings were 80, 000 and increased after 15 years was 119, 000. The maximum payout earned by Luxembourg educators was 132, 000 and
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a maximum payout spell maximum of 30years.

Japan trainer earn starting
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was 34, 000.
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, Japan masters payout not more than 65, 000 after 15 years,
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was
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their maximum wages were 86, 000. 37 years period taken by the
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their maximum payout was 37 years. Korean mentors starting wages 30, 000 and
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48, 000 after 15 years. Maximum
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earned by the Korean
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was 62, 000 and discovered maximum
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in 34 years.

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, Australia was
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pay their teachers and Luxembourg one the country they pay out more than other countries.
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