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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of kins of companies in Australia used social media for business reason from 2012 to 2016.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of kins of companies in Australia used social media for business reason from 2012 to 2016. Overall, the percentage of groups of companies fluctuated over the period of four years from 2012 to 2016. The groups of large companies accounted for the largest proportions of social media for business purpose. In the groups of big companies, the proportion of the use of social media for business purposes is the same, exactly 80%, in the years 2012, 2013, 2016. The figure in 2014 and 2015 decreased, at around 78% and 55% respectively. The percentage of the application of communication networks for business reason of small and medium companies was a significant increase, from around 30% to under 50% and above 30% to 55%, in 2012 and 2016 respectively. However, the figure in 2015 saw a dramatic fall in two groups that is the same by 30%, before reach the highest point in 2016, about 48% and 55%, respectively.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
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accounted for the largest proportions of social media for
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purposes is the same, exactly 80%, in the years 2012, 2013, 2016. The figure in 2014 and 2015 decreased, at around 78% and 55%
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.

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reason of
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was a significant increase, from around 30% to under 50% and above 30% to 55%, in 2012 and 2016
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reach the highest point in 2016, about 48% and 55%,
respectively
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