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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people in Britain going to the cinema once a month in different age groups over a 16-year period.

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people in Britain going to the cinema once a month in different age groups over a 16-year period. b2Exg
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people in Britain going to the cinema once a month in different age groups over a 16-year period. It can be seen from the graph that all the percentages of people in four groups tended to grow during the research period. In addition, the 15-24 age group experienced the most significant change, while the elderly was by far the lowest. In 1984, about 18% of people aged 15 to 24 went to the cinema compared to 10% of youngsters aged 7-14. The figures for the 25-35 and over 35 group were lower, at about 1% and 3% respectively. Over the next fifteen years, the proportion of people of all ages going to the cinema once a month went up. After soaking to 38% in 1999, the youngest age group experienced a slight decline of 6% in 2000. By contrast, the other three groups experienced increases until the end of the period, to 15% for the elderly, 60% for the 15-24 group and 32% for the 25-35 group.
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in Britain going to the cinema once a month in
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over a 16-year period.

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from the graph that all the percentages of
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in four
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tended to grow during the research period.
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, the 15-24
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experienced the most significant
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, while the elderly was by far the lowest.

In 1984, about 18% of
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aged 15 to 24 went to the cinema compared to 10% of youngsters aged 7-14. The figures for the 25-35 and over 35
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lower, at about 1% and 3%
respectively
. Over the
next
fifteen years, the proportion of
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of all
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going to the cinema once a month went up.

After soaking to 38% in 1999, the youngest
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age
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group
experienced a slight decline of 6% in 2000. By contrast, the other three
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groups
experienced increases until the
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of the period, to 15% for the elderly, 60% for the 15-24
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and 32% for the 25-35
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IELTS academic The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people in Britain going to the cinema once a month in different age groups over a 16-year period.

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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