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The line graph illustrates the percentage of Africans using two types of phones over the period of 10 years from 1994 to 2004.

The line graph illustrates the percentage of Africans using two types of phones over the period of 10 years from 1994 to 2004. Ql8RK
The line graph illustrates the percentage of Africans using two types of phones over the period of 10 years from 1994 to 2004. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the use of both fixed line phones and mobile phones in Africa witnessed increases between 1994 and 2004. In addition, it is remarkable that the figure for mobile phones experienced a boom over the period given. In terms of fixed line phones, in 1944, there were 1. 7% of African people subscribing to this type of phone and it experienced a slight increase to 3% until 2001. At the same time, the percentage of mobile phone users shared the same figure in 2001 although it started at only 0, 06% in 1994. Over the remaining period, the figure for mobile phones experienced a boom to the highest point of 8. 8% in 2004 while the percentage of fixed line phone users stood at only 3. 1%.
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graph illustrates the percentage of Africans using two types of
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phones
over the period of 10 years from 1994 to 2004.

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of both
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phones
and mobile
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in Africa witnessed increases between 1994 and 2004.
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, it is remarkable that the figure for mobile
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phones
experienced a boom over the period
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.

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phones
, in 1944, there were 1. 7% of African
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people
subscribing to this type of
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phone
and it experienced a slight increase to 3% until 2001. At the same time, the percentage of mobile
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phone
users shared the same figure in 2001 although it
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started
at
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only
0, 06% in 1994.

Over the remaining period, the figure for mobile
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phones
experienced a boom to the highest point of 8. 8% in 2004 while the percentage of
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fixed
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line
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phone
users stood at
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only
3. 1%.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the percentage of Africans using two types of phones over the period of 10 years from 1994 to 2004.

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