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The table below shows the percentage of smartphone owners using various features in Vietnam in the years 2008, 2010 and 201

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The table below shows the percentage of smartphone owners using various features in Vietnam in the years 2008, 2010 and 2012. Looking at the chart in more details, the percentage of phone calls was highest, with 100% in 2008 and 2010. While the proportion of people taking photos was increase from 65% to 77%. In terms of sending and receiving text messages, the percentage was 82% in 2008. This figure decreased to 75% in 2010 and to 68% in the last year. Playing games accounted for 63% in 2008, then the number was 80% in 2012, which was higher than that of taking photos and text message in 2012, at 77%. Finally, watching movies was the last feature which stood at 50%, 64% and 76% in 2008, 2010 and 2012 respectively.
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the percentage of smartphone owners using various features in Vietnam in the years 2008, 2010 and 2012.

Looking at the chart in more
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, the percentage of phone calls was highest, with 100% in 2008 and 2010.
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the proportion of
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taking photos was increase from 65% to 77%. In terms of sending and receiving text messages, the percentage was 82% in 2008. This figure decreased to 75% in 2010 and to 68% in the last year.

Playing games accounted for 63% in 2008, then the number was 80% in 2012, which was higher than that of taking photos and text message in 2012, at 77%.
Finally
, watching movies was the last feature which stood at 50%, 64% and 76% in 2008, 2010 and 2012
respectively
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IELTS academic The table below shows the percentage of smartphone owners using various features in Vietnam in the years 2008, 2010 and 201

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