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The provided graph illustrates the information about the amount of spent money on various form of entertainment

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The provided graph illustrates the information about the amount of spent money on various form of entertainment such as, the cinema, the video, the music, the publishing and the television in Asia, Europe and the United States in 1995 and 2000. Overall, it is obvious that in the United States was the highest indicator of paid money and its majority was the publishing. While the lowest one was in Asia and its less desirable one was the cinema in 1995. it must also be mentioned that paid money increased considerably in 2000 compared to 1995 in all 3 continents. It can be observed from the given picture that the in Asia the publishing was the most popular and the cinema the least one in the whole period. In Europe the television was the majority activity and the least desirable one the cinema. In Asia spent money hit a high of 110 in 2000, while In Europe the highest spent amount was 131 also in 2000. In terms of the United States the total amount reached the high of 257 in 2000.
The provided graph illustrates the information about the amount of spent
money
on various form of entertainment such as, the
cinema
, the video, the music, the publishing and the television in Asia, Europe and the United States in 1995 and 2000.

Overall
, it is obvious that in the United States was the highest indicator of paid
money
and its majority was the publishing. While the lowest one was in Asia and its less desirable one was the
cinema
in 1995.
it
must
also
be mentioned
that paid
money
increased
considerably
in 2000 compared to 1995 in all 3 continents.

It can
be observed
from the
given
picture that the in Asia the publishing was the most popular and the
cinema
the least one in the whole period. In Europe the television was the majority activity and the least desirable one the
cinema
. In Asia spent
money
hit a high of 110 in 2000, while In Europe the highest spent amount was 131
also
in 2000.
In
terms of the United States the total amount reached the high of 257 in 2000.
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