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The table below shows the number of visitors to four London Museum.

The table below shows the number of visitors to four London Museum. XVWoE
The bar chart compares the attendance of people to four different which are located in London, over the span of 5 month from June until December. Overall, it can be seen from the bar chart that most visitors prefered to visit museums during Augustcand their favourite museum was the British one. In June, over 400, 000 people went to the museum of Britain, History and Science, whereas above 200, 000 individuals preffered National Museum. However, during July the amount of museum viewers slightly droped except for the British Museum, which kept the number of its visitors the same. Throughout August the rate of people going to tge British Museum, the museum of a history, and Science Museum peaked at over 700, 000, 600, 000 and 400, 000 respectively. In September, the number of individuals who attended all 4 museums dropped significantly compared to the last month of summer. Although these changes in terms of the number of people visiting museums, the museum of Britain remained the most preffered among others. In tge final month of the year, the total amount of visitors decreased slightly and became under 500, 000. As for the British Museum it had amout 400, 800 attendants, the museum of Science and History Museum had 300, 000 and about 200, 600 respectively. In terms of National Museum its proportion was just under 200, 000 people.
The bar chart compares the attendance of
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which
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in London, over the span of 5
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month
from June until December.

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seen
from the bar chart that most visitors
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prefered
to visit
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museums
during
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Augustcand
their
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favourite
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was the British one.

In June, over 400, 000
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people
went to the
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museum
of Britain, History and Science, whereas above 200, 000 individuals
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preffered
National
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Museum
.
However
, during July the amount of
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viewers
slightly
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droped
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except for
the British
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Museum
, which
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kept
the number of its visitors the same. Throughout August the rate of
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going to
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British
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, the
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of a history, and Science
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peaked at over 700, 000, 600, 000 and 400, 000
respectively
.

In September, the number of individuals who attended all 4
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dropped
significantly
compared to the last month of summer. Although these
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changes
in terms of the number of
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visiting
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museums
, the
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of Britain remained the most
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preffered
among others. In
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final month of the year, the total amount of visitors decreased
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and became under 500, 000. As for the British
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it had
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400, 800 attendants, the
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of Science and History
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had 300, 000 and about 200, 600
respectively
. In terms of National
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its proportion was
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under 200, 000
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