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Challenge Freshmen Face At Colleges

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There is no doubt that the first year of college is the hardest among all years from many aspects. Freshmen tend to suffer more during the year because of bunch of reasons. They just came freshly from high schools that lacks to habilitation for this stage of their lives, which can cause them a trauma at the beginning of this thousand-mile journey. In this essay, I’ll be discussing the challenges freshmen face at college. First of all, having to study all subjects in English. In our high schools, all of subjects are taught in Arabic, so when students arrive to higher education, they are shocked with the huge amount of English they need to digest. This could probably cause them to be on the back of the train. To illustrate, a study that was done recently showed that kids who studied in international schools are more likely to achieve higher scores regrdless of the faculty. That was evident comparing to their peers in public schools who absolutely don’t receive English in the same quality. Also, having to absorb the fact that they are not young anymore. At this stage, everything that is related to your academic path is your own responsibility. This fact may be a little harsh for students who were used to be driven by others to achieve high grades. There are a lot of horizons to pursue during college. You will have to be your own tutor and figure out the right ways for you to get great scores. There are lots of things that are burden on a freshmen as they finally stepped into college. They have to understand their weaknesses, analyze the characteristics of their teachers, be responsible for attending their classes on time and the list continues to on. To sum up, obstacles are normal for freshmen. Every level of our lives bring its difficulties with it, but being smart in dealing with these difficulties will turn the table for your own favor. Use the obstacles you face as a guideline for you to determine your weaknesses and finally turn them into strengths. College’s administration must insure steps are taken to reduce this phenomenon deteriorating future.
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year of college is the hardest among all years from
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Freshmen
tend to suffer more during the year
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because
of
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bunch of
reasons. They
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just
came
freshly
from high
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schools
that lacks to
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habilitation
for this stage of their
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lives
, which can cause them a trauma at the beginning of this thousand-mile journey. In this essay, I’ll be discussing the challenges
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freshmen
face at college.

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First of all
, having to study all subjects in English. In our high
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schools
,
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all of subjects
are taught
in Arabic,
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so
when students arrive to higher education, they
are shocked
with the huge amount of English they need to digest. This could
probably
cause them to be on the back of the train. To illustrate, a study that
was done
recently
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showed
that kids who studied in international
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schools
are more likely to achieve higher scores
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regrdless
of the faculty. That was evident comparing to their peers in public
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schools
who
absolutely
don’t receive English in the same quality.

Also
, having to absorb the fact that they are not young anymore. At this stage, everything that
is related
to your academic path is your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
responsibility. This fact may be a
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little
harsh for students who were
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used
to
be driven
by others to achieve high grades. There are
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a lot of
horizons to pursue during college. You will
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have to
be your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
tutor and figure out the right ways for you to
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get
great scores. There are lots of things that are burden on a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
freshmen
as they
finally
stepped into college. They
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have to
understand their weaknesses, analyze the characteristics of their teachers, be responsible for attending their classes on time and the list continues to on.

To sum up, obstacles are normal for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
freshmen
. Every level of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
bring its difficulties with it,
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but
being smart in dealing with these difficulties will turn the table for your
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own
favor.
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Use
the obstacles you face as a guideline for you to determine your weaknesses and
finally
turn them into strengths. College’s administration
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must
insure steps
are taken
to
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reduce
this phenomenon deteriorating future.
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IELTS academic Challenge Freshmen Face At Colleges

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
362 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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