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International migrants in 2000 to 2017.

International migrants in 2000 to 2017. OgYE3
The chart illustrate all out figure of international migrants in four various countries ( USA, Russia, Germany and India ) in two periods 2000 to 2017. The table gives proportion about population of migrants in each country in last period. Overall, at the starting of the time the USA got the highest figure of migrants while Russia and Germany were lowest then the USA. Nevertheless, India was the lowest country during both period. In the period given, the highest number of migrants got by the USA nearly 35 millions, whereas, Russia was just over 10 millions, following by Germany by just under 10 millions migrants. Nevertheless, the lowest number of migrants got by India, around 5 millions. In addition in 2017 the number of migrants in the USA had increased to reached 50 millions migrants. However Russia still the same figure while Germany has increased just over 10 millions on the other hand India got a slight decline. In 2017, 13. 5 per cent of population got by the USA, while Germany got the highest percentage by 14. 7 per cent. Whereas Russia and India were the lowest two percentage by 8. 2 per cent for Russia and 0. 4 per cent got by India.
The chart
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all out figure of international
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in four various countries
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USA, Russia, Germany and India
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in two periods 2000 to 2017. The table gives proportion about population of
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migrants
in each country in last period.

Overall
, at the starting of the time the USA
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got
the highest figure of
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while Russia and Germany were
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then the USA.
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, India was the
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country during both period.

In the period
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, the highest number of
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by the USA
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35
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, whereas, Russia was
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over 10
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, following by Germany by
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under 10
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millions
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number of
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by India, around 5
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. In
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in 2017 the number of
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in the USA had increased to reached 50
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the same figure while Germany has increased
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over 10
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on the other hand
India
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a slight decline.

In 2017, 13. 5 per cent of population
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by the USA, while Germany
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the highest percentage by 14. 7 per cent. Whereas Russia and India were the
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two percentage by 8. 2 per cent for Russia and 0. 4 per cent
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by India.
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