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The table below shows the average weekly salaries of men and of women working in different occupations.

The table below shows the average weekly salaries of men and of women working in different occupations. 7Jw72
The given table represents the average salary paid each week for men and women in different jobs in 2015. At first glance, male workers tend to receive more salary than their female colleagues. To begin with, male professionals had the highest income in the given year, proven by a 2000$ weekly salary. Following right after are technicians with an earning of 1400$ each week. The corresponding figures for service and administrative workers ranged from 1300$ to 1350$ respectively. Manual labor, however, has the lowest salary compared to other jobs - which was only 1100$. On the other hand, the difference between female technicians' income and that of males was 500$, which was the most significant regarding women's income. Similar to males, female professionals had the highest income among other jobs - 1900$, marking a difference of 100$ to that of males. The same trend can be seen in the other jobs, whereas their female figure hovered around 850$ to 1000$, which was relatively lower than male's. In fact, female service workers and clerical workers earned 350$ less than men, while that of manual laborers was 250$.
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paid each week for
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in 2015. At
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tend to receive more
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than their
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colleagues.

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with, male professionals had the highest
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in the
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year, proven by a
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2000$
weekly
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. Following right after are technicians with an earning of
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1400$
each week. The corresponding figures for service and administrative
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workers
ranged from
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1300$
to
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1350$
respectively
. Manual labor,
however
, has the lowest
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The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$1100".
1100$
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hand, the difference between
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female
technicians'
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and that of
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males
was
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500$
, which was the most significant regarding women's
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. Similar to
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males
,
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female
professionals had the highest
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among
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1900$
, marking a difference of
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100$
to that of
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. The same trend can be
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, whereas their
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figure hovered around
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850$
to
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1000$
, which was
relatively
lower than male's. In fact,
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female
service
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workers
and clerical
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workers
earned
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350$
less than
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men
, while that of manual laborers was
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250$
.
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