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Survey on parents control on adolescent life choices

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The table showed the results of a survey of 200 different sex adolescent and their parents on how parents control their adolescent children different life choices. The results showed that parents were like to show control on their children's decisions. Father's were most keen to control their children's choices than mothers inmost of choices as subjects to study, how they spend their time, occupation they pursue. The only exception was for what friends they make, where nearly 80%o of mothers were more like to but restictions
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sex adolescent and their parents on how parents control their adolescent children
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life choices.

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that parents were like to
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control on their children's decisions. Father's were most keen to control their children's choices than mothers inmost of choices as subjects to study, how they spend their time, occupation they pursue. The
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exception was for what friends they
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IELTS academic Survey on parents control on adolescent life choices

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  American English
2 paragraphs
85 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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