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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries

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This table describe the information and predictions of the percentage of the population of the elderly people that increased since 1988 until 2030 in Canada, Germany and UK. there are 3 things that is comparing in this table. firstly, in 1988, the population of elderly people in Germany has the highest percentage among others. then, Germany still had the massive population of elderly people in 2000 and is predicted with huge number of percentage in 2030. the growth of the population of UK is the lowest percentage of the elder-people population. UK got 14. 23 % in 1988 and slowly increased to be 14. 89% in 12 years later. It was predicted will be growing with 5. 45 % in for 30 years later. and the last was Canada with the percentage of population around 16. 32% which grew with 4. 35% in 2000. the prediction of population in Canada will be growing up to 26. 35% which is increased around 5. 68% in upcoming 30 years. It showed that the percentage of population of the elder-people will be around 20% in 2030 for all three countries.
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that increased since 1988 until 2030 in Canada, Germany and UK.

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in Germany has the highest
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, Germany
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had the massive
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of elderly
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in 2000 and
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in 2030.

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the
growth of the
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population
of UK is the lowest
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of the elder-
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. UK
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14. 23 % in 1988 and
slowly
increased to be 14. 89% in 12 years later. It
was predicted
will be growing with 5. 45 % in for 30 years later.

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the last was Canada with the
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of
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around 16. 32% which grew with 4. 35% in 2000.
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prediction of
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in Canada will be growing up to 26. 35% which
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around 5. 68% in upcoming 30 years. It
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of
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will be around 20% in 2030 for all three countries.

IELTS academic The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries

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