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The Increasing of the Population Aged 65 and Above

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The number of population has been increasing nowadays. These numbers could be found from data population of the three countries, such as Canada, Germany, and UK. In 1988, UK had 14. 23 percent of the population aged 65 and above. Along with it, there was Canada had 16. 32 in percentage. The highest percentage was in Germany with percentage of population aged more than 65 years old was 20. 45. At the beginnig of 21th century, in 2000, the population's percentage aged 65 and above increased in these countries. The lowest percentage was in UK with 14. 89 percent. It raised a little in several years. Then, Canada raised a lot in the past twelve years became 20. 67 percent. And Germany was gained more with percentage of 25. 32. From these data, it could be predicted the numbers of population would increase more. In 2030, percentage in UK predicted to be 20. 35, in Canada would be 26. 35, and in Germany would become 30. 42. These numbers predicted to be increase more.
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has been increasing nowadays. These
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numbers
could
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from data
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population
of the three countries, such as Canada, Germany, and UK. In 1988, UK had 14. 23 percent of the
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population
aged 65 and above. Along with it, there was Canada had 16. 32 in
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percentage
. The highest
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was in Germany with
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of
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population
aged more than 65 years
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was 20. 45.

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21th
century, in 2000, the population's
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aged 65 and above increased in these countries. The lowest
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percentage
was in UK with 14. 89 percent. It raised a
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little
in several years. Then, Canada raised a lot in the past twelve years became 20. 67 percent. And Germany
was gained
more with
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percentage
of 25. 32.

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the
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numbers
of
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would increase more. In 2030,
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in UK predicted to be 20. 35, in Canada would be 26. 35, and in Germany would become 30. 42. These
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predicted to be increase more.
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IELTS academic The Increasing of the Population Aged 65 and Above

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6.0
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